COPY CLEANUP!
BEFORE!
Bleh. Boring. Disjointed. Uninspired.
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Let’s see what we can do…
AFTER!
Wow, amazing! I did this myself. Better flow, more competence, more personality. More realness.
BEFORE!
I think it can look a bit better…
AFTER!
It looks so much better!
I rewrote this ad for Henry Cloud. I made it flow way better and sound more real.